Errr... I kinda liked the slurring of the other one. Also, the font above the reimu farthest left is a little iffy. I can see the text boxes. Just letting you know
Eh, honestly, I don't care enough to pore over every translation or comment. If there's notes available I'll just copy them for the edit. If I catch an error I fix it, but if I don't, I don't.
That's just the size of my love, is all. If you feel that your love is bigger go ahead and upload a fixed version and I'll flag this one for deletion.