I'd recommend posting them in yukkuri threads first before posting them here since there is no delete function apparently. You misspelled their in the last panel.
Additionally, >Last panel should be something like "...the Reimu who lost everything cried out in the rain like a child", not "Reimu lost everything...etc."
>Also, using "not soon after" instead of eventually doesn't make sense. Even dropping the "not" would've been a better choice.
We really need a deletion function. Anyone good with PHP?