This is an interesting story, yet another take on how despite all good intentions, Mister Human will always find themselves tested by these so-called bringers of "Easiness". Also, the real reason why the universe hates yukkuri: they bring misfortune down on themselves.
I like how you manage to inject character and depth in the world your stories are set in. Little details, like Anon's interjections while monologuing and "Mariela" and "Regina" as localized names for the two yukkuri makes the setting come alive.
As a suggestion, how about posting your story in the forum (make a new topic) or in the wiki (under "text_stories" tag) next time? That way, viewers won't be clobbered by your wall of comment stories.
Im pretty sure he was talking about the pic before this story. Take it eaje.
--------------------- yukiyuzen said: I'll be straight-forward, you write like shit. This is really, really bad.
dont flood the forum with stuff like that, nobody cares, I dont care and I will not modify anything, nor Ill pay attention to spam like that next time, if you dont like something just ignore it and be easy.
I'm sorry, but I'm going to have to second him. You really, really need to work on your spelling, grammar and punctuation. Reading that made my eyes hurt. (You didn't even get the yukkuri names right, too.)