Excellent work. You did a good job of portraying Fatchouli as the arrogant and spiteful yukkuri it is. That little pee spurt shows you pay attention to detail. Just one thing- the font for the "SLAP" sound effect doesn't do the effect justice- I recommend something thicker.
Also, those two characters at the end remind me of Guts and Caska- large man with a square jaw and damaged eye and a dark-skinned woman with black hair.
The one thing I think you do amazingly that which I agree with SUN on is your detailing. The little things you carried from previous pages and other things you put in ,whether artistically or in writing, has a fun touch thus making it pleasing to the eyes.
I try to make my pages as quick as possible for this little game but I think your pages are just too great to do that. Whatever pace you work at, if the future pages look anything like this, I'd approve.
By the way, Fly... I just noticed something: That last panel that Fatchouli is in, is that a tooth I see? Did he hit her so hard it knocked a tooth out?
I was kinda losing interest in this series. Too many people trying to one up each other with more and more twists and characters. How, pray tell, did you manage to tie everything together, and have the best looking page? Its amazing!
Fragtagonal said: I was kinda losing interest in this series. Too many people trying to one up each other with more and more twists and characters. How, pray tell, did you manage to tie everything together, and have the best looking page? Its amazing!
Easy. Fly did not do any magic by adding any new characters to the story, or twists, or "trying to one up each other" in general. All Fly worked on is what's already in the story, then simply moved it to the most ideal direction this story should go. It's what differentiates the true classic stories from your flavor of the month seasonal series.